This is the second draft of the story, based on comments and personal reflection.  I didn’t want to simply delete the old story because it is good for comparison purposes.  That said, I think this version is far superior.

C> Story Integration Initiation…….

Beginning Story Integration Initiation…

[Formulating Exposition]… Detailing Parameters Setting… Random Generator In Effect- Correcting Unknown Error- Selection Made Pursuant To Topical Protocol.

This story takes place in New Orleans, Louisiana.  It was hot and humid. [Simile Function]  Like the smoke from a recently doused campfire. [Correcting… Sentence Structure And Colloquialism Program Intact…Reformatting] The campfire air stuck to everything it touched.

Int hashpjw(int M, char* t) { unsigned h=0, g; for(;*t;++t) { h = (h << 4)+ *t; if(g=h&0xf0000000) { h ^= g>>24; h ^= g; Protagonist generation (ongoing)= female= 22.3 years= Caucasian= Mesomorph= Adelaide {Peccadilloes Enumerated}==Constructing…

Adelaide touched the water on the shore with her hand. [Image Filter Function Realized- Processing Visual Imagery] Adelaide knelt down by the shore and let her fingers dance across the slowly flowing surface of the water, careful not to stain her [Search…Extrapolating Plot Point]

c>ERROR

C>ERROR

Rebooting program…

Progress recovered successfully. [Resuming Story Integration Initiation]…

Adelaide knelt down by the shore and let her fingers dance across the slowly flowing surface of the water, careful not to stain her black dress.

[Conflict Generator Engaging] itemType must have struggle to “inner self” or “outer self”, which identifies the purpose <class inner, class outer=int> class ConflictSort { public: // Conflict Files

Generation Complete…

A man appeared. [Suspense Nominator Online..Image Filter Function Realized- Processing Visual Imagery..Antagonist Generation Complete]

Please wait…

Please wait…

A shadow eclipsed her shoulder and she turned, startled to see a man leaning against an old cemetery tree in the waning light. indexType Dialoguecount) { static indexType i; typedNormal unsigned chat* American English; Crawling Web for Syntax…Proper Geographic Vernacular Achieved… That dress is a tad too nice for such juvenile behavior, don’t you think?

Program coefficient confirmed… embedding further language… type word “reveal” at C> to see further language…

Go to hell, she scoffed, rising to her feet, the warm air flowing past her out to the river beyond.

The man glanced down at a tombstone near his feet and shook his head. You just don’t get it, do you…

Don’t say it- don’t say it again.

Baby, he’s gone…

Shut up! she screamed. Just shut up! She stomped past him but he grabbed her arm and twisted her until their faces lay inches apart.

You listen to me good, sweetheart. The slow syrup of his words oozed out and lingered on her lips. Sometimes I wonder if you even realize the danger you’re in- sittin’ out here all day, playin’ like a damn child. He placed a sweaty hand on her face and forced her to look back toward the river. How much effort does it take to look over there and picture your pretty corpse tangled up in those roots? Don’t seem so safe no more, now does it?

She turned her head [error: message 22] and bit down hard…

Program Error<count; ++i) ++occurences[((UCP)&a[i])[bytenr]]…Data Dump= Erasing Memory.

This program has encountered an error.  All unsaved data will be lost.

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